Zelda Night

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LET THE WHOLE THING BLOW

B A S I C I N F O

★ NAME: Zelda Night
★ NICKNAME: Zelda
★ MEMBER GROUP: Gijinka
★ POKEMON: Vulpixx
★ AGE: Fourteen
★ HEIGHT: 5'3"
★ WEIGHT: 95 lbs.
★ FACE CLAIM: Character's name
★ APPEARANCE:

Zelda has long brown curly hair that goes a couple inches under her shoulders. She inherited her curly hair from the pokemon that she was infused with. She has bron rather large eyes. She is rather pale. She usually wears a light shade of turquise dress that ends just above the knee, the dress is sinched at the waist with a whit bow. It has a layer of frills under the colored top. She wears tight under with brown ballet flats. She usually wears her hair with a pink headband with a bow in it.

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P E R S O N A L I T Y

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Zelda is very trusting, she could trust anyone that will go up to her. She is on neither side and sort of just wonders on her own. She doesnt even hate humans like most Gijinka. She just stays away from most of the under ground stuff, but she would never join the Epispect. She is kind to anyone and is always willing to lend a hand. She really isnt the bet person to ask a judgmental question to because she would just see the positive of everything. She is optomistic for her age, and she hopes one day that all ths conflict will blow over.

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P L A Y E R I N F O

★ OOC NAME: Cat
★ AGE: Thirteen
★ OTHER CHARACTERS:Nope I am a new member.
★ RP SAMPLE:

Winter


Winter was walking throught the college grounds, she was deciding if she should join or not. She was bored of what she did usually so she wanted to try to mix things up a little bit. She walked into the main office. She had just made her decisions. She walked into the office quietly and waited for the office lady to notice that she was there. The office lady was a little spooked when she looked up, but she imedietly asked why Winter was there. Winter imedietly enrolled into the school, she was going to start tomorrow. She walked out of the main office into a herd of kids gong to and formt here cars.

Than Winter looked up to see a blondey at about medium hight sitting by a tree. Winter had very keen eyes so she could see that he had blue electric shocks in his hand. She looked over to the jock that was walking by them. All the sudden he cried out in pain and the blondey was laughing. Winter rolled her eyes and started to walk over there. When all the sudden a kid about 2 feet taller than her came out of no where and stopped the jock from punching the blondey. The blondey was still laughing about shocking the kid. As Winter got closer she realised that the blondey was a vampire. Definitly not a pureblood though. He was for sure a noble. The tall kid had black hair and was a little bit goth. He really intimadated Winter but she went up to them anyways. "Umm hello! I just happened to sense you from across the courtyard." said Winter, looking at the blonde kid and than the tall kid. She could tell that they could smell her scent to. Which was extraordinary to the other demons. She smelled wonderful. She smiled at the pair. Waiting for there reply.

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[★ Ryuujin !]

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Okay, first off, the picture will need to go. Make it into icons maybe for the top instead? But it can't stay where it is. Next, your entries are placed into the wrong parts of the template, they shouldn't be red, or in the brackets, etc. So if you could fix that as well, that would be great.

Next, you have a couple things that contradict or just needs to be fixed. She's 5'3" and 95 lbs, with no real reason to be so underweight? If you could either state her being anorexic or fix her weight to be at least 105 that would be great as well.

You state that she never believes that you're lying and can easily trust and then that she's too trusting and can trust all the wrong people - all are pretty much the same thing. Replace the never believes that you're lying from the positive traits, as it's a negative trait, and replace one of the two in the negative traits with something else if you could. Maybe consider replacing the other one in your positive traits as well, as you could get that across easily with a single negative trait about being too trusting. If you need a list of examples, feel free to ask.

Lastly, in your history, you state that she was given to an orphanage because Epispect didn't want to take care of her because she was too young. Epispect wouldn't take care of her anyway, even if she was of age, they just don't care, she's not their problem to worry about. So if you could edit that little bit too.

After you're finished, reply to this and we'll get you situated. ^^

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