Shadow Star- Human

[shadowstar7]

NAME: Shadow Star

NICKNAME: Sha

MEMBER GROUP: Team Rocket.

POKEMON: Oshawott

STATUS: n/a.

AGE: 15

HEIGHT: 5 2'

WEIGHT: 99.7 lbs

APPEARANCE: Thin, pale white, green eyes. Black hair with yellow tips. Wears all black and has a red R on his right back pocket. He also has a scar on his neck shaped like a V.

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P E R S O N A L I T Y

POSITIVE:

*Kind
*Helpful
*Hopeful
*Humble
*Honest


š NEGATIVE:

*Anger
*Wrath
*Can be lazy at times
*Sometimes slobish
*attacks without thinking


HABITS, QUIRKS:

Tends to shy away from most people.
Is afraid of certian pokemon, mostly fire types...

OVERALL PERSONALITY:

Shadow is very shy. He will not trust you unless you prove yourself. He has no trust in Epispect. He likes to meditate in slince to focus himself and clam his mind.

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H I S T O R Y

*He got his V-shaped scar at birth. It was just there. No one knows how it got there...

*He had a dream once, which he believes to be the future. The leader of Team Rocket standing infront of a crowd smiling.

*His memory was striped from him. All he remebers is his name and everything since he turned 15... Which is when the leader of Team Rocket found him and took him into the ranks of Team Rocket.

*A single song brings Shadow to his knees in pain. Heart of life. He believes it is in connection with his missing memory...

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P L A Y E R I N F O

OOC NAME: Sha

AGE: 15

RP SAMPLE:

I'm in a dark room... Fire, lightning, ice... They fight, striking, circling and surrounding me... A huge V of fire rushes towards me. I flinch but something happens... The fire, ice and lightning rush at me as one, but the flaming V protects me... The three attackers disappear and I'm left alone with the V...

"W-Who are you?"

It turns towards me and blue eyes flash. "Call me... A friend..." Blues eyes look deep into me and the thing smiles at me. "Good luck... I'll see you later..."

I wake up with a jolt. "Gah! Huff, huff, huff..." I look around, nothing... My room is pitch black, though something shines through my window. I get up an look outside... A bolt of lightning outside... I see black and white mixing into gray... I shiver and close my eyes...

"D-DADDY! H-HELP MEEEE!" I sit on the icy ground. Three pokemon battling, White, black and gray... The white one shoots out fire, and the black one lightning, but the gray pokemon shoots ice. All three attacks bounce off eachother and come at me.

"SHADOW!" My father rushes outside from our house and pulls a pokeball out. "GO GARDEVOIR!"

The pokemon turn torwards my dad and all three attack, the three moves fusing together.

"Gardevoir... END THIS!" A huge flash appears from the pokemon and the attacks hit my father... He takes them all and fades away... The three legondarys shimmer and dissappear.

"D-Dad...? DADDY!"

I close my eyes and cry, my dad was dead...

I awake from my flashback and tears fill my eyes... I stand up and wipe them away. This is what my dad would want... "Today... Today I need to face my fear... Today I get a Pokemon..."

I walk downstairs to my living room where my mother is waiting for me with a small breakfast. Toast and a glass of ice-cold water...

"Shadow! Good your up! Hurry and eat, today's your big, BIG, day!"

"Y-Yea mom... Thanks..." I smile and shake my black hair out making it cover my left eye. I quickly eat all my food and get up to leave.

"Shadow... Are you ok? Something wrong?"

"I-It's just... Dad... I miss him so much..." Tears fill my eyes again and I let them fall.

My mom comes over and hugs me close. "I know... I do to... But he protected us... He did it to keep us safe..."

"I-I know! But why! WHY US!" I keep crying into my mother and she comforts me.

"Remeber... Everything happens for a reason... God has his plans for you... And he had plans for your father..."

I wipe my eyes and nod. "Your right mom... I need to do this for dad... God has a plan for us all. And this is one of them..." I stand up and give my mom a hug.

"Here's your bag. I added a few extras for you... I think you'll like them."

"M-Mom..." I give her a hug again and smile."T-Thanks..." I look inside and see a small blue poketch, an escape rope system, and a good amount of zenni. "Thank you so much mom... I love you..."

And with that I walk out the door and i'm off to the pokemon lab, where my first pokemon awaits!

[ress]

currently pending

Welcome to the site. Before I can even look at your app, you'll need to fill out the profile template, which can be found here. I should note, however, that you cannot see the future.

[ress]

currently pending

You've copied and pasted for the format, but you need to quote the original post in order to get the code.

First, I'm a bit perplexed by his name. Shadow Star is a very odd name for a human being, so I assume there's some sort of significance for it. I'd like to see that included in his history.

Your appearance needs a bit more. How long is his hair? How does he stand? And so on. Give us a bit more to work with.

Your traits are confusing and contradictory. If he's honest, helpful, kind, etc - how is he wrathful? What is 'anger'? Is he angry a lot? Does he have anger issues? Try and avoid weasel words like 'sometimes' and 'can be' with negatives. If he's shy, that should be one of his traits. We'll also need a bit more written about his personality, since there's no connection between what you've written and his traits.

Onto history. While he might not know where it's from, someone must. Was there an accident? Is it a birth mark? The dream of the future will have to go. Your character cannot have dreams of the future. Team Rocket is recent, and there's no way he could have known what the leader looked like until recently.

While he might have amnesia, I still need to know his history. Who is he? What was his past like? At the moment he essentially has no past, which might work from an RP standpoint, but from a history standpoint I need to know what happened. The bit about the song is a quirk, not really a point of history.

Your RP sample also doesn't seem like an RP sample. Do you normally RP like that? If so, you'll likely have issues, as everyone on site (or at least the majority) roleplay in third person past tense.

When you've made the edits, please post to let me know.

[shadowstar7]

Ok im sorry, but this seems to be hard to understand and confusing seeing as I just came from pokemonlegacy... I may abandon this and leave... I'm sorry...

[ress]

Alright, I'll archive this then. Please let us know if you want to have it unarchived.